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Sneki
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PostSubject: Confusion.   Confusion. EmptyTue Dec 04, 2007 9:33 am

I'm so lonely in the shadow of perfection,
I'm looking around.
Singing a quiet song
In expectation full of desire.

It's hard to hear time passing by,
I'm not living for a moment
and I don't want no eternity.
In my mind there's only a bittersweet pleasure.

Where ? What ? Why for ?
I don't know..
This look always brings tears in my eyes..
But I can't hate it.

With every thought
he means more to me.
He is closer..
But so far away.


There is no life without you.



It's my first English poem, I wrote it 2 years ago... I hope it's not too weird. Very Happy
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Sweet Innocent
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Join date : 2007-12-03
Age : 32
Location : Malaysia

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PostSubject: Re: Confusion.   Confusion. EmptyTue Dec 04, 2007 9:36 am

No. It is not weird. It is good. I am not good at poetry but for me it is good.
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